Creating a character

In drama I was asked to create a character and give him/her voice so I wrote a monologue.
This is me delivering the monologue.

Monologue

Hi, my name is Lily and I am 20 years old. When I was 13 years old I was obese and I suffered from bulling in the school, I felt depressed like a loser, awful, also devastated and lonely. My parents died and I wanted to kill myself because I had to stay with my cruel and nasty uncle John that hated me and always told me: "You are disgusting, you are the most obese person that I have never seen, I hate your parents and I also hate you!".

Finally, I changed to another school and I did a medical treatment to get thin. I got nice and nowadays I live with my grandmother who makes me feel comfortable and she regularly told me: "You are a cute girl, you don't need a medical treatment because you are pretty". My new friends told me: "you are lovely" but anyway I thought that I was ugly.

One day I was in my house watching TV and in one moment the things started to move, I felt dizzy and confused. The television fell, the floor began to open and a dark hole started taking me inside, I fell in. I thought that the hole didn't have an end, because of that I climbed the wall until I arrived to the surface. I had a nasty feeling as if I had fire in my stomach, I looked myself through a mirror and I saw that I didn't have hair, I had a strange skin as if I had a lot of rocks under my complexion. I started crying but I saw myself again and I saw that I was half a monster and half me. I became aware that I was a cute girl, that I wasn't horrible as my uncle had told me and as I had thought before but now it was too late.
Now I am afraid to go outside, I am afraid to be seen. And I realized that being fat was not such a big problem...What will I do now?

Here is my Video.