Formal letter writing

In the Language class we were asked to wrote a Formal letter about crime. "Whose responsability is to prevent crime? Write a letter to the editor explaining your views. Give specific examples of what the police can do to protect themselves and their neighbours." Here is my formal letter:

Dear Editor,
                    I am a resident of Adrogue and the purpose of this letter is to complain about the incidents of insecurity, burglary and the car theft, in particular, since they have been rising.
To prevent these crimes the police can hire patrol on the streets, on foot or patrol car, to avoid in particular kidnapping. However, i fully agree with the fact of instaling cameras on the street, in other words doing things to avoid crimes. Furthermore, i fully support responding the crime quickly, in some situations people call police and them don't anwer.
Young people who commit crimes need to understand they have done something wrong because if not it will never stop, in other words we have to think it over about crimes. For this reason, people have alarms intalled, sensors. I agree with the fact of avoiding talking to strangers, you never now if is true what they tell you.                   To sum up, i fully support that the best way to stop crimes is to teach about how to prevent it, therefore there won't be any more crimes.

Sincerely Maite